ext_215561 ([identity profile] grok-mctanys.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] rich_jacko 2012-01-01 02:43 pm (UTC)

That's pretty amazing. Thanks.

One editorial comment - the line "[...] my mentor, our friend, they guy I had killed." doesn't seem right, grammatically or plot-wise.

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