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2012-01-01 02:43 pm (UTC)
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That's pretty amazing. Thanks.
One editorial comment - the line "[...] my mentor, our friend, they guy I had killed." doesn't seem right, grammatically or plot-wise.
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One editorial comment - the line "[...] my mentor, our friend, they guy I had killed." doesn't seem right, grammatically or plot-wise.